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Episode Seven - Part 18

  • Sep. 12th, 2008 at 7:10 PM
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Andy hit replay on the video for what seemed like the hundredth time and watched the final confrontation between Nathan Holt and Emily Laine.  He’d felt a sickening drop in his stomach when he’d seen her flash on the screen earlier, little more than a ghostlike blur on the edge if the frame.  He fully expected her to get killed, and felt a pang of what may have been regret.  He should have known she’d run off to play hero.

 

He’d been understandably surprised when she not only held her own, but completely overpowered the vampire.  She was even carrying herself differently, which only served to make him want her all that much more.

 

As he’d been watching initially, fully a half an hour ago now, he’d hardly taken notice of her companion.  The tall teen had hardly moved at all, even when Emily had been thrown backwards.  When he’d killed Nathan, it had caught Andy so off guard that he actually jumped.  Of course, seconds later he’d destroyed the camera, surprising him even further.

 

Now he found himself wondering if she'd managed to survive Nathan Holt only to be killed by her friend.  Considering the information he’d been able to gather on Jacob Towans, it was very possible, but deep down he highly doubted it.  Whether or not he himself had seen it coming, the boy had clearly not been aiming at the girl.  He could see that in the final seconds of video as he locked his eyes on the camera, giving Andy the crawling sensation that he was looking directly at him.

 

Andy knew he’d just found a very valuable new resource, and it pained him to know that he’d been right under his nose the whole time.  His focus shifted away from the video and to the few thin files on his desk in front of him and the scant amount of information available on the kid.  He lived alone in near-poverty with his elderly great aunt who suffered from dementia, moving in with her after his parents died in an automobile accident in the Cascade Mountains a few years earlier.   They’d been highly intelligent government workers who left their only child a small fortune, but he wouldn’t be seeing a penny of it until his twenty-first birthday.  There were one or two passing references to him receiving psychiatric treatments, a few mentions of hospitalization, and one arrest record (no charges filed).  The details on these were sketchy at best, and for the most part completely nonexistent.

 

The video ended once again with a violent shaking that gave way to complete blackness.  This time instead of watching it again, Andy switched off the monitor absently.  He’d seen everything he needed to see for tonight, not least of which had been Markus Green’s entry into the underground world of the undead.  For now, he was content with the way things had gone and was ready for a good night’s sleep.

 

He had to pay a visit to one Ms Lois Towans, and wanted to be well-rested when he did.

Comments

[identity profile] sims-gone.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 03:11 am (UTC)
Great episode!

But...but...but what's wrong with Mary?? She's very tired and something has shown up in her bloodwork that's going to be expensive. Great, she's either pregnant or she has cancer or something. Whatever it is, she'd better just tell Emily about it soon. No more of this handling everything by herself crap.

I can't believe Markus got turned. How terribly sad for him and Serge. I guess he and Emily can form an "I'm in love with a vampire" support group.
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[identity profile] enchanted-black.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 03:34 am (UTC)
Great update! :D

I, too, wonder what Mary has and I'm wondering how Serge is going to take Markus being a vampire. I can imagine not very well.
[identity profile] orestes-tayte.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 04:33 am (UTC)
That was a great episode!

Damn that Andy he's such a fucking bastard! (but I love him for that very reason xD)

I'm looking forward to see how Markus' ordeal plays out. And I think I know what's up with Mary but I'm not saying anything ^__^
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[identity profile] msmcknittington.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 04:45 am (UTC)
So many questions that will not be answered until the next episode or several episodes in the future, I'm sure.

Chrissary Emily, guys. Chrissary Emily.

By the way, I'm totally joking about the Chrissary Emily thing. First of all, I don't think either Mary or Chris are closet Mormons, so Chrissary is right out. And I also believe that too much time has elapsed since their encounter for Mary to pregnant with his child.

ETA: OK, since my apparent goal tonight is to fill up [livejournal.com profile] aikea_guinea's inbox with comment notifications, a list of things that are possibly wrong with Mary:

-- the aforementioned Egyptian flu (in 9 months she'll be a mummy, mwah ha ha)
-- some strange vampire STD
-- diabetes (though, whoa, you guys, that would be totally out of left field)
-- Chronic Fatigue Syndrome
-- West Nile Virus
-- depression expressing itself as flu-like symptoms
-- anemia
-- malnutrition
-- scurvy
-- Andy/Jade has infected her with some rare disease from the jungles of Central America
-- rheumatoid arthritis
-- she brought something back from the underworld (the horrors!)
-- Lyme disease
-- exhaustion/stress

I'm tapped out. It could be anything!
[identity profile] aikea-guinea.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 05:05 am (UTC)
Your goal has been obtained, but that's ok. I haven't laughed this much in ages!

XD
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[identity profile] msmcknittington.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 05:20 am (UTC)
Oh, god, she's got scurvy, doesn't she? :| Too much vodka, not enough OJ!
[identity profile] rosewalker.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 22nd, 2008 08:26 pm (UTC)
This.
[identity profile] xellyfer.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 15th, 2008 08:31 pm (UTC)
... Or cancer?
(Anonymous) wrote:
Oct. 15th, 2008 08:21 am (UTC)
"First of all, I don't think either Mary or Chris are closet Mormons, so Chrissary is right out. "

I don't get it?
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[identity profile] msmcknittington.livejournal.com wrote:
Oct. 15th, 2008 08:34 am (UTC)
It's fairly common for Mormons, especially in Utah, to name their children after both parents by cramming parts of both parents' names together to form a new name. So if the dad is named Dan and the mom is named Leigh, the baby might end up named Danley or LeighDan or something like that. Or Chrissary, I guess, given the right parts. ;)

Check this out. (http://wesclark.com/ubn/)
(Anonymous) wrote:
Nov. 3rd, 2008 01:11 pm (UTC)
Is there any way she could be dead?

Oh please don't make us wait 6 months to find out!
[identity profile] fireflower314.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 05:51 am (UTC)
But we don't know what's going on with Mary? Oh mannn, now I'm going to be in such suspense until the next update! I'm very worried about her.

Anyway, great episode! I hope Markus and Serge both can handle Markus's vampirism okay. I loved that Tristan and James got so much time together, and the Emily and Jacob scenes were also fantastic. Oh! And I love that Mary's going to be working for the boys now. That should be hilarious.

I can't wait for episode eight!
[identity profile] twistedtutu.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 05:49 pm (UTC)
Fab epsiode
But what is wrong with Mary?! I'm terrible with this whole 'patience' thing =/
[identity profile] necroticmind.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 07:23 pm (UTC)
Another great episode, as usual!
What's wrong with Mary?? I need closure! LOL
I simply can not wait until the next installment. x)
[identity profile] kkkayleighh.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 13th, 2008 07:46 pm (UTC)
Yayy. :DD
I loved it. :3
[identity profile] shooflea.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2008 04:56 am (UTC)
Perfect, ladies. Great episode!
[identity profile] inyri-jax.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 14th, 2008 05:40 pm (UTC)
OH man ... Serge is gonna have kittens when he finds out.

As for Mary, how weird would it be if it turned out that she had anemia? Hubby has it ... and it's scary close to what I've read.

But then ... she and the old doc could be having a baby.

Or she and Chris. LMFAO! Ok that would be funny and it would suck massive hairy donkey balls all at once.
[identity profile] tainted-fidz.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 16th, 2008 09:12 pm (UTC)
Ooooh Andy, you fiendish evil man!!! *scowls*
Leave wittle Jacob alone!

Such a fantastical episode. Definitely worth the wait!
I shall be waiting with bated breath for the next installment!

I loved the Emily & Jacob scenes! Mostly because I adore wee Jacob and his crazy ways ^_^
[identity profile] night-revenant.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 16th, 2008 11:58 pm (UTC)
If Deception Pass was a plot made of cake, it'd be one of those gooey, moist infinite-layer chocolate cakes with rainbow sprinkles on top.

First and foremost, Andy is at his best when he's evil <3. I loved that Markus had more airtime in this episode, I do feel for him and Serge though with the new lifestyle (deadstyle?) change. James and Jacob made me cackle with glee and I went 'splee!' at the sparring between Tristan and Emily (and immediately told my boyfriend that we are going to have to do the same thing : P) and as for Mary, it's awesome that she got a job but she's also sick as well.
[identity profile] rosewalker.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 22nd, 2008 08:48 pm (UTC)
WTF... why did this not show up in my flist? Aaurgh!

I lurve Andy.
[identity profile] kadoatie07.livejournal.com wrote:
Oct. 28th, 2008 06:18 am (UTC)
Lovely episode. I am a new reader of DP and I just wanted to tell you how much I've enjoyed this story. I have gotten SO sucked in to the story and the lives of Emily, Mary, Tristan, James, Jacob, Markus and the rest of the gang. This is just a fantastic story with wonderful writing and breathtaking pics. Great job. I look forward to the next episode! :)
[identity profile] littlemuddypaws.livejournal.com wrote:
Jan. 20th, 2009 04:52 am (UTC)
My mind won't let this rest...
Someone correct me if I'm wrong, but my mind keeps trying to tie these strings together. ONE: Doesn't Abigail live in L.A.? TWO: Didn't Glass see her do something he couldn't and say he'd pursue it later? And subsequently have an out of town conference to attend? I remember he said something about it to Andy. THREE: We know he learned something or he wouldn't have spoken with Xero. FOUR: Serge just got back from out of town, L.A., wasn't it? FIVE: Serge knows Markus schedule can be shifty, but he seemed unusually alarmed for Markus to have been out of contact for a few hours. Any number of perfectly harmless and logical possibilities, though the correct reason was anything but harmless. So, I guess what I'm wondering is, "What happened in L.A.?"
[personal profile] meoryn wrote:
May. 8th, 2009 11:37 pm (UTC)
I wanted to leave the commenting till the end.

Wow. That's all I can say. You can write one ripper of a story. The world is so immersive and the characterisation is just top notch. There are no 2D cutouts here. All your characters are so 3-Dimensional with a perfect balance between strengths and weaknesses. These are characters that readers can relate to which brings the readers to develop an attachment to them. That is a really great thing for a writer to achieve. To have readers care what happens to these characters shows a certain level of skill. And it's quite clear that you understand each of your characters intimately in the way you write for each of them.

A while ago, I stopped reading sim stories because I felt the screencaps were a bit of a distraction for me but I have to say, your screencaps not only enhance the storytelling aspect of DP but also adds that little extra atmosphere. I really enjoyed both looking at the pictures and reading the text. Your set design is very breathtaking. You must have a lot of CC in your game! There is so much attention to detail in them. I can't imagine how long it must take for you to set up and sim out all those scenes. That's dedication. Amazing work.

Andy is such a great character. I know he's manipulative and evil but he does it so well - a mark of a great villain. Markus being turned, that particular scene was intense. I also love the way you handle jacob. I find him an incredibly interesting character. Hell, I find them all interesting characters but they were definately the stand-outs in this episode for me.

It's been a while since I've read a good story on the internet and this ranks right up there as among the best I've read to date. You've done a truly remarkable job with this story.

Thank you for allowing us to venture into your world by sharing the story with us.
[identity profile] leethium.livejournal.com wrote:
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:21 am (UTC)
I think Mary has Lupus. Oh wait - it's *never* Lupus...